5 Minute short film
Ancillary texts
Poster
Magazine Review
Wednesday, 27 March 2013
Monday, 25 March 2013
Left Unread Final Cut
Below is the final cut of my short film with all the suggested improvements been made.
Thursday, 21 March 2013
Montage tests
From the Forth cut of the short film my teacher said "The only other suggestion I would make is that you should consider editing the montages to be a little edgier... applying an effect or two to make them a little grittier/manic would add to the feeling they're there to evoke."
This is the first test of the effects being applied to the montage.
In the next test I remove the effect and applied a scratch effect, see video below to see this test.
This is the first test of the effects being applied to the montage.
On presenting this test to my media teacher he said:
• Don’t like the effect on montages at all.
• I meant more like this but a bit more subtle:
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Comments were:
• No... looks more like rain. I say scratch it and put them back to just the clips sans effects.
Also couple of minor but important things...
• You’ve misspelled Mr Smith’s first name.
• At 4:27 there’s an odd change in ambient sound. Need to level it out.
• This is a suggestion... & the last thing I’ll add... could the clock get louder as the final scene progresses? I think it would add to the tension. Other than that I think it looks great.
Now after this suggestions, I will remove the effects for the montage and return them to how they were before. Also I will improve on the couple of mistakes that I made and improve the short film on my teachers suggestions.
• You’ve misspelled Mr Smith’s first name.
• At 4:27 there’s an odd change in ambient sound. Need to level it out.
• This is a suggestion... & the last thing I’ll add... could the clock get louder as the final scene progresses? I think it would add to the tension. Other than that I think it looks great.
Now after this suggestions, I will remove the effects for the montage and return them to how they were before. Also I will improve on the couple of mistakes that I made and improve the short film on my teachers suggestions.
Tuesday, 19 March 2013
Fourth Cut and Feedback
Here is the fourth cut of the short after the improvements from the third cut have been added.
Feedback:
• The introduction is much better - title, fade in, timing etc all works.
• The new POV shots from the bus look great
• I'm not sure if you need the shots of the protagonist getting off the bus. Try cutting at 1:22 straight to 1:26
• Camera at 2:05 is not needed
• And the one at 2:14 also can be removed... kind of gone the other way and overdone them now. :-)
• Ending is better... the timing of the BB shot needs to coincide exactly with the 'gun shot' sound.
The only other suggestion I would make is that you should consider editing the montages to be a little edgier... applying an effect or two to make them a little grittier/manic would add to the feeling they're there to evoke.
Almost there... tis all in the tweaking.
• The introduction is much better - title, fade in, timing etc all works.
• The new POV shots from the bus look great
• I'm not sure if you need the shots of the protagonist getting off the bus. Try cutting at 1:22 straight to 1:26
• Camera at 2:05 is not needed
• And the one at 2:14 also can be removed... kind of gone the other way and overdone them now. :-)
• Ending is better... the timing of the BB shot needs to coincide exactly with the 'gun shot' sound.
The only other suggestion I would make is that you should consider editing the montages to be a little edgier... applying an effect or two to make them a little grittier/manic would add to the feeling they're there to evoke.
Almost there... tis all in the tweaking.
Wednesday, 13 March 2013
Final Review
Below is the review with the improvements from the last version and I have decided along with my media teachers agreement that this is the final version of my magazine review. I have changed the adjustment of the text so that it fills each column rather than being left justified.
I have now created the poster and magazine review for my short film. Now I need to pay full attention to improving and tweaking the last adjustments to my short film.
Tuesday, 12 March 2013
Third Cut and Feedback
Below is the third cut of the short film with the improvement from the last cut.
Feedback (as left on video):
• 00:25 - this shot can be shortened and the voice over should come in much sooner
• Also, the earlier shot of the ppl on the bus, I think you should get rid of it - it does not add to the narrative and it is a bit too rocky
• The montage comes in at the right time. I think it could be broken up at the point that it says "look at them all"... - a couple of shots to show ppl here and now and then cut back into the montage.
• Also, some of the audio associated with the montage could have been included very low down in the mix to add to the tense atmosphere of the narrative.
• 01:16 - this shot needs to come out - the montage should continue to: 01:22 ending on "freedom".
• The second montage also needs to be a bit more broken up / interspersed and it needs to relate more directly to the words if you see what I mean???
• Needs to be more spread over the walking sequence alongside shots of cameras watching - build the intensity - link images to the ministries create a claustrophobic atmosphere.
• 02:41 - the title needs to be a bit smaller and fit more neatly into the letterbox
• Sound effects at the end and the editing still needs to connote a greater sense of violence - you could include a very *subversive* flashed image of Hitler/BigBrother - almost so quick that if you blinked you might miss it. :-)
Overall... you are on the right track... the ending sequence and montage's represent the best work within the film. The overall concept and idea is good and the narrative is clear until that last shot and the cut to black - the audio (sound bridge) needs to be fixed to ensure the end is strong.
I also think that you need a prod company title at the beginning and slightly longer fade in...
Good work, let me know if you want to discuss any of this further. :-)
Saturday, 9 March 2013
More Stock Footage
For the new cut of the short film I need more stock footage to use in the new montage scenes, therefore I needed to search for some new videos. Here are the videos that i have decided to use:
http://youtu.be/-pUmfKX3C04
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Friday, 8 March 2013
Magazine Review Versions
These are the first two versions of the magazine review that I produced. After producing each version I presented it to my teacher for his feedback and improvements and then produced the new version with the suggested improvements having been applied.
Version 1
Feedback:
• Review the codes and conventions from research to improve the overall design of the review.
• Create columns for the text rather then large blocks of text.
• Add some general information such as cast, director, certificate etc.
• Add the name of the writer to the end of the review.
• Change the image as there are better images within the short film that can be used.
Version 2
My Teachers Comment was:
• The only edit I would make is to make the body text left/right justified. It will look cleaner - I'm fairly certain you can do that in InDesign.
Version 1
• Review the codes and conventions from research to improve the overall design of the review.
• Create columns for the text rather then large blocks of text.
• Add some general information such as cast, director, certificate etc.
• Add the name of the writer to the end of the review.
• Change the image as there are better images within the short film that can be used.
Version 2
My Teachers Comment was:
• The only edit I would make is to make the body text left/right justified. It will look cleaner - I'm fairly certain you can do that in InDesign.
Tuesday, 5 March 2013
Second Cut and Feedback
This is the improved second cut of "Left Unread" with the changes from the first cut been added.
I presented this cut to my teacher for his input and below are his suggestions for what needs to be improved.
• More stock footage.
• Stock Footage needs to change, create a montage instead of individual clips.
• The montage stock footage needs to have quick cut and show an erratic nature
• The line "Look at them all" the shot should show people walking in the street.
• CCTV camera need to be added
• Ending, change over the shoulder shot to a point of view shot of the flyer.
• Sound bridge at the end needs work to make it flow.
• Credits need to be added.
Now I need to progress and undertake in the improvement, mostly less changes are editorial, therefore I don't need to ask my actor to return.
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