First Cut Feedback

From the first cut of the short film, these are the improvements that have been suggested by my media teacher.

• Audio - mix of sound, what extent can audio be removed, audition to remove sound
• Bus and walking scene to similar - Greater variety of camera shots needed.
• Opening needs changing, does not fit with the rest of the film. Does not look like a prison cell.
• Door and bus need a cross dissolve.
• Visual bridge for the unknown date.
• STOCK FOOTAGE
• Add shots of CCTV camera to make the walking scene more uncomfortable
• Remove the milk from being hit so hard on the work top, interrupts the calm flow of tea scene.
• Change ending, protagonists looking at flyer while sitting on chair.
• Sound bridge between the protagonists and the flyer and the end of the film.

These are the suggested improvements, I now need to go and create a revised shooting schedule and proceed with the reshooting of the short film.