"Left Unread"

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5 Minute short film

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Poster

Magazine Review

Left Unread Final Cut

Below is the final cut of my short film with all the suggested improvements been made.

Montage tests

From the Forth cut of the short film my teacher said "The only other suggestion I would make is that you should consider editing the montages to be a little edgier... applying an effect or two to make them a little grittier/manic would add to the feeling they're there to evoke."

This is the first test of the effects being applied to the montage.

On presenting this test to my media teacher he said:

• Don’t like the effect on montages at all.

• I meant more like this but a bit more subtle:

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In the next test I remove the effect and applied a scratch effect, see video below to see this test.

Comments were:

• No... looks more like rain. I say scratch it and put them back to just the clips sans effects. 

Also couple of minor but important things...
• You’ve misspelled Mr Smith’s first name.
• At 4:27 there’s an odd change in ambient sound. Need to level it out.
• This is a suggestion... & the last thing I’ll add... could the clock get louder as the final scene progresses? I think it would add to the tension. Other than that I think it looks great.

Now after this suggestions, I will remove the effects for the montage and return them to how they were before. Also I will improve on the couple of mistakes that I made and improve the short film on my teachers suggestions.

Fourth Cut and Feedback

Here is the fourth cut of the short after the improvements from the third cut have been added.

Feedback:
• The introduction is much better - title, fade in, timing etc all works.
• The new POV shots from the bus look great
• I'm not sure if you need the shots of the protagonist getting off the bus. Try cutting at 1:22 straight to 1:26
• Camera at 2:05 is not needed
• And the one at 2:14 also can be removed... kind of gone the other way and overdone them now. :-)
• Ending is better... the timing of the BB shot needs to coincide exactly with the 'gun shot' sound.

The only other suggestion I would make is that you should consider editing the montages to be a little edgier... applying an effect or two to make them a little grittier/manic would add to the feeling they're there to evoke.

Almost there... tis all in the tweaking.

Final Review

Below is the review with the improvements from the last version and I have decided along with my media teachers agreement that this is the final version of my magazine review. I have changed the adjustment of the text so that it fills each column rather than being left justified. 

I have now created the poster and magazine review for my short film. Now I need to pay full attention to improving and tweaking the last adjustments to my short film.